Friday, April 23, 2010

Football


GO!!!
Yea im about to make the tackle.......
POP!!! SNAP!!!
what the? what was that...
that really hurt... i cant run...
i missed the tackle. i cant get up.
it hurts to move...
well that f@#$ing sucks!!!!!!!!!
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2 comments:

  1. danielfludMay 5, 2010 at 9:39 AM

    I like it, it almost sounds like one of mine. I liked the last line. I think you could make it better by lenghting it and explaining better.

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  2. calanahrensMay 5, 2010 at 9:41 AM

    Reminds me of the good ole days. Very elaborate. Maybe use more imagery in the scene.

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